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Monday, January 2, 2012

River, Marina Moevs, 2005

Take 1:

RIVER, water
a source of life
a sight of beauty...

but i warn thee
to be careful
for a silent river
might also be a danger...

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Take 2:

Be like a river
that offers a drink
to the thirsty
exhausted
traveller...
Free
fresh
and never ending...


posted for Magpie Tales Photo Promp 98
Photo Courtesy of Tess Kincaid
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21 comments:

  1. Jim CalcuttJanuary 2, 2012 at 9:12 AM

    Very nice, JJ. I like Take2 best. Good work as usual but I may be a bit blinded by love. Hehe.

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  2. SemaphoreJanuary 2, 2012 at 9:28 AM

    These two takes contain the essence of very strong narrative poems, and it would be interesting to see how they developed if you explored them further... particularly take 2, which hints at a great voice, and a unique perspective on the picture.

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  3. anthonynorthJanuary 2, 2012 at 9:32 AM

    The two faces of the river. Nicely done.

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  4. Kathe W.January 2, 2012 at 10:00 AM

    two ways of looking ....excellent! Happy New Year!

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  5. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarryJanuary 2, 2012 at 10:02 AM

    that's life, way to go.

    lovely beginning and finish,
    well done.

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  6. TeresaJanuary 2, 2012 at 10:03 AM

    These are wonderful. I especially like the mystery of the first one.

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  7. MonikaJanuary 2, 2012 at 11:13 AM

    Exploring the depth of those blue, never ending waters. True and poignant pieces.

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  8. SuzJanuary 2, 2012 at 11:18 AM

    I like what Semaphore said
    and I agree that I lingered on the second one
    I have love like a river
    I have love like a river
    I have love like a river in my my soul
    .....loved this song from childhood

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  9. KayJanuary 2, 2012 at 11:19 AM

    hi, i like take two best as well....never ending...nice!!

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  10. Laurie KolpJanuary 2, 2012 at 11:41 AM

    Love the contrast between the two.

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  11. chiccorealJanuary 2, 2012 at 7:47 PM

    Dear JJ: Both takes are dramatic; capturing the pure essence of the prompt. Rivers can dangerous and also they can provide necessity. Love the economy of well-chosen words. Reminds me of a haiku.

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  12. Cathy FeasterJanuary 2, 2012 at 10:40 PM

    both really good, but I love the second one :)

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  13. kaykualaJanuary 3, 2012 at 4:45 AM

    ParengJJ,
    Great take, simple and sweet. Nice Magpie Pareng!

    Hank

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  14. LynJanuary 3, 2012 at 7:08 AM

    Deep, profound take..ever true!

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  15. HelenJanuary 3, 2012 at 10:59 AM

    Take 1 ... Take 2 ... I'll take both!

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  16. izzyJanuary 3, 2012 at 4:07 PM

    Both true! good for you.

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  17. Wayne PitchkoJanuary 4, 2012 at 12:23 AM

    all very good....nicely done and thanks for sharing your words

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  18. Carrie Van HornJanuary 4, 2012 at 7:31 PM

    Both beautiful takes JJ....but I especially love the 2nd one! :-)

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  19. Brian MillerJanuary 4, 2012 at 9:31 PM

    nice...of the two i like the second one most...be the river...

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  20. Jeannette,January 4, 2012 at 9:58 PM

    profound thoughts jj...i like the second one..i want to be like the river.

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  21. Ms. Geek GoddessJanuary 7, 2012 at 6:08 PM

    Nice! Take one is a bit spooky and take two is a great message on how to be in life! :)

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