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Monday, January 2, 2012

River, Marina Moevs, 2005

Take 1:

RIVER, water
a source of life
a sight of beauty...

but i warn thee
to be careful
for a silent river
might also be a danger...

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Take 2:

Be like a river
that offers a drink
to the thirsty
exhausted
traveller...
Free
fresh
and never ending...


posted for Magpie Tales Photo Promp 98
Photo Courtesy of Tess Kincaid

21 comments:

  1. Very nice, JJ. I like Take2 best. Good work as usual but I may be a bit blinded by love. Hehe.

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  2. These two takes contain the essence of very strong narrative poems, and it would be interesting to see how they developed if you explored them further... particularly take 2, which hints at a great voice, and a unique perspective on the picture.

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  3. The two faces of the river. Nicely done.

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  4. two ways of looking ....excellent! Happy New Year!

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  5. that's life, way to go.

    lovely beginning and finish,
    well done.

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  6. These are wonderful. I especially like the mystery of the first one.

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  7. Exploring the depth of those blue, never ending waters. True and poignant pieces.

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  8. I like what Semaphore said
    and I agree that I lingered on the second one
    I have love like a river
    I have love like a river
    I have love like a river in my my soul
    .....loved this song from childhood

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  9. hi, i like take two best as well....never ending...nice!!

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  10. Love the contrast between the two.

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  11. Dear JJ: Both takes are dramatic; capturing the pure essence of the prompt. Rivers can dangerous and also they can provide necessity. Love the economy of well-chosen words. Reminds me of a haiku.

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  12. both really good, but I love the second one :)

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  13. ParengJJ,
    Great take, simple and sweet. Nice Magpie Pareng!

    Hank

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  14. Deep, profound take..ever true!

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  15. Take 1 ... Take 2 ... I'll take both!

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  16. all very good....nicely done and thanks for sharing your words

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  17. Both beautiful takes JJ....but I especially love the 2nd one! :-)

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  18. nice...of the two i like the second one most...be the river...

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  19. profound thoughts jj...i like the second one..i want to be like the river.

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  20. Nice! Take one is a bit spooky and take two is a great message on how to be in life! :)

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