Sunday, September 11, 2011

2 takes: Fading Away & Check Me Out

There you are I know
across the hall.

In your usual clothes
I can feel your gentle and slow moves.

I can sense 
your presence
staring at me..

But the moment 
I moved my head to 
glance where you are...

I was saddened
seeing you slowly fading away.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

Did you return 
to check me out?

I am still sad, weak 
and disappointed.

But take your rest
my love...
from afar let's 
guide one another 


remember our
happy moments.

the happy thoughts,
joyous memories
and the good words
and experience you gave
will be my tools
to make a better life...

The Reverant, 1949, Andrew Wyeth
Magpie Tales Photo Prompt #82
Photo Courtesy of Tess Kincaid


  1. The photo was surreal. :) Happy weekend JJ. :)

  2. Very well done, JJ. I like it (both parts).
    — K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

  3. living in those happy memories is the way to once more live intersting write for sure...hope you have a wonderful sunday...

  4. Yeah I think the photo is a perfect pairing with the poem. Very beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

  5. Oh, this is really interesting. I like it that you gave him the benefit of the doubt. He looks like one mean son of a gun, to me!

  6. Both wonderful. I especially liked the first part. Made me sad.

  7. Fading away, that caps it. We almost had the same concept of the artwork.. :)

  8. A wonderful poem and photo! :-)

    God bless and have a great week :-)


  9. So many memories came visiting reading your poem.
    But allow me to point this out monsieur. The font color is just too much of a struggle for people with eye defects such as me. Forgive me.
    The poem is beautiful, nonetheless.

  10. nice magpie
    I liked the first one the best...

  11. Awesome tone! I love how the melody of these words play on my ears!

  12. Remember our happy memories - lovely

  13. Dear JJ: Love how the two parts of the poem are in opposition. The latter half of the poem imbues much hope for the lovelorn;

    But take your rest
    my love...
    from afar let's
    guide one another

    VA very thought-provoking and deep intensely-felt true feeling poem!

    jane jones chiccoreal (cant log on to post comments for some reason so i have to go under anonymous!)

  14. This has a lovely, lyrical flow to it..and finally acceptance...

  15. Very interesting. I like the gentle tone of your words.

  16. I really enjoyed the first piece- I agree his moves seem like they are slow and smooth!

  17. Thank you for your kind comment about my poem.
    I enjoyed reading yours and you have interpreted the image well.
    "Don't cry because it's over. Smile because it happened." ~ Dr Seuss. :-)

  18. @ Mugen, thank you for the appreciation!

    @ Kay L. Davies, Thank you for liking the two parts...

    @ Brian Miller, thank you sir!

    @ Michael Offutt, you are welcome sir and thank you too..

    @ Brandee Shafer, LOL! you are really into him ei...

    @ thingy, thank you maam for liking...

    @ the green breaker, guess we are on the same mood. hehehe... thanks buddy!

    @ Mary, thank you maam...

    @ T.O. Geezer, thank you sir... you too sir have a great week...

    @ Desole Boy, thanks for the comment and thank you for the input...

    @ Suz, my sister, thank you for appreciating...

    @ Tumblewords, thank you!

    @ tim, thank you for the appreciation...

    @ Isabel Doyle, thank you!

    @ JJ aka chiccoreal, you always have good words for my work. thank you very much! well appreciated...

    @ Lyn, thank you very much!

    @ Joe Bryant, thank you sir!

    @ Ann Grenier, Thank you maam!

    @ Tess Kincaid, thank you maam for this pic. and thank you for the appreciation... My FB friend...

    @ izzy, ur welcome and thank you too...

    @ Nicholas V., thank you sir for the nice comment and input. and thank you for the visit...

    Your comments made me more eager to take the next Magpie Challenge... God bless everyone!


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